Thursday, October 21, 2010

Problems with obesity

The personal and societal problem with obesity is that some people now a days take obesity as it comes and attempts and now accepting obesity. Obesity sets a bad example for children of young age by showing that it is okay to sit around eating junk, and doing nothing with your lif. To obess people deep down they wish they could have stopped themselves when they had the oppurtunity but as much as they sit around only wishing, does nothing to their body and they tend to get depressed and eat even more than before. which increases the bad influence and obesity, which is effective to our environment. So folks please let's stop obesity before it stops us.

1 comment:

  1. 'obesity as it comes and attempts and now accepting obesity' I'm confused. Might wanna rephrase that.
    'obess' spell check.
    'deep down they wish they could have stopped themselves when they had the oppurtunity but as much as they sit around only wishing, does nothing to their body and they tend to get depressed and eat even more than before.' All that confused me. Insert your periods, and commas appropiately.
    'which increases' capitalize "Which"
    'So folks' So [comma] folks
    Overall, good point. Its good that your writing more than five sentences. I will appreciate it. :)

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